My Fanfic

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6122940/1/Who_I_Am

So I'm trying my hand at fanfiction. This is the first chapter of what I hope turns out to be a decent story. Nikki has already given me a lovely review.

OMG
IT'S REALLY GOOD SO FAR!
I LOVE IT!

Regulus was somewhat of a crybaby

HAHAAHHAHAHAHAHAA

But something happened to us.

Something we couldn't avoid.

We grew up.

I really like this part for some reason. It's good!!

I like that part too!
It's like...
WOAH


-waits for more-

Thanks guys. I've never gotten those reactions before. I mean, I've always gotten the "You're really good response," but no one has ever pointed out specific parts that they liked, or told me they can't wait for more.

*is Quaffly by this point*

If all goes well I should be able to update tomorrow, Saturday at the latest.

That last bit that Dee quoted was my favorite too!!
I really like the way you've written it, the point of view and diction and whatnot.
My only question was about the age/order of the Black sisters. I was always under the impression that Bellatrix was the eldest?

Thanks Pansy.
I actually will be changing PoVs throughout the story.
In regards to their birth order, Bella is the oldest and Cissa is the youngest, but I have a specific scene practically already written in my head, and in order for it to happen the way I want I had to change their birth order.

I LOVE it!

Just was curious!
I really like it so far, I'm excited to read more!

I LIKE IT. I think you've got good prose. Like, a lot of fanfics I've read are good enough, and I like them, but they're not ASTOUNDING in the way they're written. I really like your prose. Yeah.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6122940/2/Who_I_Am

So this took a lot longer than I expected to finish this, but here it is. Enjoy!

*flails* It's really good!!!!!! I love it!!!

*blushes* Thanks. Now I leave it alone until August so I can use anything I write for AugMo.

Do I have to wait that long to read more?

That makes me sad.

It won't be long, but I really want to use it for AugNoWriMo. Although, if Chapter 3 is as short as I think it will be, I might write it before August.

I JUST READ THIS NOW

The house elf turned and grinned toothily up at me. "Master Regulus is hiding in his closet, Mistress Narcissa."

I LOVE YOU

"Sirius hates me. He hates our family. He hates me, he hates Mom and Dad, he hates your parents, he hates Bella, and he hates you too!"

AWWW
This makes me sad. I almost teared up. -hugs little Reggie-

OMG
I LOVE IT
MORREEEEE
WRITE MORE
-chants-

I LOVE YOU TOO!!

I have far too much fun writing Regulus like that. I should make him grow a pair.

...Nah.

I almost cried too. Especially since it's true.

Thank you!! I think I will write more over vacation. Which is now. If we're not doing anything tomorrow, I'll definetly start.

YAY! More Coming!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6122940/3/Who_I_Am

La la la.
Here is Chapter 3.
I kinda think I messed up Bellatrix, but whatever.
Let me know.